the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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At the present time,
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large number of
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prefer to buy online shopping as demands of it are developing with velocity among the world. To my mind, it is not
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point.
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believe it is wrong to purchase through online shopping.
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to buy cannot become well as they await.
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internet channels.
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it can be some defects.
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cannot correspond to humans.
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that some online magazines may be
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in order to take a
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money with
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carrying the goods to regions do not insist
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costs, they increase the costs of them. In terms of alternatives, there are a few options that we have. Online magazines are becoming more popular in today's world. These provide more population's energy
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to get their necessary things and customers bring them without any anxieties.
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markets. To draw a conclusion,
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purchase through online markets, I would recommend that whiten
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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