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Now a days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Employment is the most necessary thing, in order to live and lead a life. In
this
 present technological world majority of
people
 prefer to be self-employed, despite
of
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working for any other
company
 or organisation. I will discuss why society is thinking
this
 way and some disadvantages of it.
Firstly
, myriad
people
 do not choose to work for some other institutions or
companies
. Because
,
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 they don't want to waste their own knowledge by investing in other
companies
.They will have a thought of starting their own organisation.
For instance
, there is a start-up
company
 that recruits only erudite and gives
a
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basic pay. In
this
 present scenario, getting jobs are quite difficult.
However
, there are small organisations which recruit
people
 with very less pay. Recruiting
people
 who are knowledgeable, will definitely lead to the growth of the
company
. So, an individual thinks that
instead
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 working hard for other
companies
, they can work much
more
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harder to start their own business and earns better. Despite the advantages, there are many adverse effects of being self-employed. One possible drawback is, if
people
 are working in other organisations, they may never get lost. Since
,
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 he is not the owner of the
company
.
However
, if a person starts his own institution he should pay his workers , despite
of
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the
company
 being in loss or
profit
.
For example
, a person having an automobile
company
that is
 running well. Since his
profit
 has been increasing gradually, he recruited few more employees. Some day, another person has started the same type of
company
 and advertised
about
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it to the community.
People
 started shifting to
this
company
. So, a decrease in workers leads to a gradual decrease in income as well as
profit
. Henceforth, it might have several adverse effects. To conclude, working under some other
companies
 is an easy job and we need not have to undergo much pressure. It may be either
profit
 or loss for a
company
, but they can get a salary at end of the month and enjoy the salary with their family.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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