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Many cities have serious problems with traffic congestion? What are the causes of these problems? What are some possible solutions?

#cities #traffic #congestion
Nowadays,
cities
 are expanding with the development of technologies and economic growth.
Therefore
, many
cities
 face traffic congestion. There are significant reasons which are caused by human activities.
First
 and foremost, many people prefer to live in a comfortable place and a convenient site so that the public tends to setter to urban
cities
. They
also
 require the urban place to get jobs, go to a high-educated school, and commit to the workplace.
Therefore
, on roads, there are a lot of
vehicles
such
 as
cars
, motorbikes, and buses due to move between places. Another thing is gathering folks in developed sites which produces environmental issues.
For instance
, with the construction of occupations, natural materials are cut down from forests, and nature is destroyed by using the source of lumber.
As a result
, habitats of animals and plants would have vanished and it
also
 would be serious of global warming.
Additionally
,
vehicles
such
 as
cars
 are an important factor of the pollution in the city. Individual
cars
 usually produce CO2 which cause by climate changes and high temperatures. So, for all those who utilize these
vehicles
, the quality of air is worsened and it connects to green issues. In order to relieve traffic jams, the authority should introduce utilizing public transportations
such
 as train and sharing cycles.
This
 never creates the emission of CO2 and enables reduction jams on roads which the rush time in morning and evening.
Moreover
, many people employ public transportations which are
also
 able to lessen the emission of CO2 from individual
cars
.
In addition
 to that, if eco-friendly
vehicles
 using the oxygen engine are spread, more and more
cities
 would be able to stop the urban green problem in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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