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Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games. Why do they do this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Access to computers has increased significantly over recent decades, and more and more
adults
 playing
games
 on
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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.
This
 essay will discuss why
myriad
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 of
adults
 present
this
 preference and why it is a positive development. These days, many employees are under the
stress
 because of
heavy
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 workload, job insecurity and conflicts with co-workers or bosses, and the
stress
 leads to burnout.
Majority
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 of employees do not have a work-life balance,
hence
 they spend much time in front of a
computer
, playing
games
 online. While doing
this
, they don’t need to think about their work and they can fully focus on the
games
. By doing
this
,
adults
 can relieve their
stress
.
Furthermore
, it’s cheap and comfortable. Game users don’t have to pay a lot of money unless they buy some game items, and almost every
adults
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 can play
games
 in their own place.
Thus
, playing
games
 is
genuinely
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 perfect way for
adults
 to alleviate their
stress
.
In addition
, while playing
games
, they can have a chat with other users.
This
 can be another way of
assuage
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 the
stress
 that came from their work. In their workplace, employees always meet the same
people
 in the limited area,
consequently
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 they cannot socialize with many
people
.
However
, when they playing
games
,
adults
 can meet numerous new
people
 online and have a chat with them. Their conversation topics are not limited to work, but their daily lives, friendships, family, and future plans. Some
people
 even meet offline and became
a
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good
friend
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friends
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.
This
 whole process can help them to reduce their
stress
. Thanks to easy access to
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a computer
the computer
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computer
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computers
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,
adults
 can play
computer
games
 more often these days and they can manage their
stress
 by playing
games
. All in all,
this
 aspect is expected to
be have
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positive
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a positive
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 effect on many
adults
.
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