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QUESTIONS: WITH A FAST PACE OF MODERN LIFE MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE TURNING TOWARDS FASTFOOD FOR THEIR MAIN MEALS. DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

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In
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 present world, it is visible that people tend to eat more fast
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 in their daily meals. It is mainly due to the hectic lifestyle of individuals who are busy with their day to day work. The two sides of the argument will be analyzed and discussed in
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 essay before drawing a reasoned conclusion.
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, the person selects to eat fast
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 because of its various advantages.
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 as mankind is really busy and due to the less time they have, they could purchase the fast
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.
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, it is more affordable with the price
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compared to a balanced nutritious diet.
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,
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food
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 industry has developed very healthy alternatives
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 sugar biscuits.
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 is why it can be argued that there are certain pros
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 it.
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, a vast range of disadvantages is inevitable due to the excess amount of eating snacks.
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such
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 as chips contains a large number of additives, saturated fat, sugars.
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, eating a lot of fast
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 can cause health problems
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 as obesity.
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, the community could lead to unhealthiness.
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, it is clear that eating fast
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 will
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result
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more
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 disadvantages to the human body. To summarize, it can be clearly stated that having fast
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 constantly
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 many cons than its cons.
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, I would mention that the advantages will not outweigh the disadvantages.
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