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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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One of the highly controversial issues today relates to
environment
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the environment
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.
Energy
 from the sun is becoming famous increasingly
such
 as house
energy
in
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worldwide. In
this
 essay, I will explain both sides of view. There are reasons why using solar
energy
 is becoming popular.
First
 of all,
people
 tend to take care of
planet
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the planet
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. According to
media
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, the world temperature is getting increased about 1.5
degree
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 from 50 years ago.
People
 are always watching about
this
 matter and they have to review their
habit
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habits
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 and routine.
Secondly
, it is one of the
action
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actions
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 for residences to take part in preservation. When the
people
 using recycle
energy
 in the house, they can feel participate in keeping earth project. There is no doubt that using solar panels have some benefits.
To begin
 with, it is easy to install our house. Recently, when
people
 purchase or rent their home, the provider urge to purchase solar
panel
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panels
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 which supply
for
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them
discount
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the discount
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 price.
Hence
,
people
 are able to cut down
daily
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 expenditure.
Moreover
,
this
panel
 can produce much more
energy
 for us during
use
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other
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of other
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 equipment.
For example
, water, wind power, there are hard to equip and provide less
energy
 than
sun
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 power.
On the other hand
,
solar
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panel
 has some demerits.
Initially
, it
is depends
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 on
weather
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the weather
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. If the cloudy continues for long days,
this
 system cannot absorb the sun and save much
energy
 to use electricity.
In addition
,
panel
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a panel
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 of solar takes high primary and
maintain
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 costs.
This
 means that when
people
 want to attach the
panel
, it spends a lot of money. After the installing,
this
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 panels are fragile structures. As for
this
 problem,
people
 tend to repair it at least once within two years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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