Many young people regularly change their job over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Nowadays people move from one
job
to
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frequently.
Although
,
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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of
job
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the job
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and to get
promotion
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are the
the
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main reason;
however
, I believe that later outweigh the former and will discuss my
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in forthcoming paragraphs. The main reason strike to my mind is that
,
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people change their
job
regularly because when they
feels
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uncomfortable at some they switch to it and prefer to find new jobs.
Also
, wages satisfaction is another cause behind it, because
others
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jobs offer them more salary according to their experience, whereas, if person
continue
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with
same
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job
, they provides them little increment.
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this
,
working
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environment is
also
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of concern, when employees are not well cooperative and dominant
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each other in front of their boss, it increases their stress level and prefer to quit that
job
and find
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one. To justify it, a survey was conducted in
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XYZ
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company and seen that the main cause of resignation was
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relationship between workers and employees. The drawbacks of switching from one
job
to other
is
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more considerable.
Firstly
, it is difficult to adjust in
new
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working environment, because every company have their own rules and regulations and it takes
long
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time to adjust in them.
Secondly
, building good relationships at work is
also
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easy
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task, if they want to develop
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a relationship
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relationship
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with colleagues, they have to work hard. So that they can get
good
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a good
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position at
office
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.
Also
, people need to change their accommodation when they change the
job
,it increases the mental stress of their families as well as employees
,
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because children always face trouble in making new friends. To conclude, while,
job
satisfaction and promotion are the main cause of changing
job
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jobs
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regularly, I believe that
it's
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cons are more than pros
such
as enhance mental stress because everything is new for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • personal fulfillment
  • values
  • fulfilling
  • benefits
  • motivator
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • climbing the career ladder
  • dynamic work environment
  • adaptability
  • opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • flexibility
  • professional and personal lives
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