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In today’s world of advanced science and technology, many still greatly value artists such as musicians, painters and writers.What can the arts tell us about life that science cannot?

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There has been a significant divergence of opinion revolving around whether affluent
people
 or
society
 contributors like scientists and teachers represent success. From my point of view,
people
 who play a pivotal role in
society
 are recognised as successful.
First
 and foremost, in terms of affluent
people
,
people
 refer to those with monetary power that
allow
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 them to enjoy
the
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apply
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life to the fullest. To be specific, these
people
 have
freedom
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 to make choices where money is a deciding factor.
For instance
, they could opt for whatever means of transportation when travelling, their children have more choices regarding educational institutions.
Moreover
,
people
 in high
society
 are less likely to be affected by the economic crisis. Due to the fact that they have financial security, which supports them to overcome
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 condition, wealthy
people
 become richer and more successful
as a result
.
However
, social contributors are
also
 deemed as charismatic figures.
Although
 they are not the wealthiest
people
, they have
significant
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 public influence on others. It can be exemplified by the fact that scientists and teachers are prestigious occupations in many countries. It is apparent that they have acquired a reputation in their field of interest and contribute knowledge to social development. To specify, scientists dedicate their time and effort
in
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 the laboratory and come up with solutions for various problems, thereby assisting
people
’s lives. Teachers have a direct impact on students’ mindset,
as a result
, they receive
respectation
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expectation
 and recognition from
society
 as well. To sum up,
although
people
 who earn a decent amount of money are those who succeed in finance, I strongly believe that social contributors deserve to be coined as successful because they offer a powerful impact on other
people
.
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