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Some people say that it is always better if the majority of the employees are given options to work from home as traveling to the workplace during this Covid 19 times is risky? Give your views.

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It is often argued that employees should have an opportunity to
work
 from home to reduce the risk of contracting coronavirus. I completely agree with
this
 statement, and in
this
essay
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 I will explain my point of view.
Firstly
, one of the arguments in
favor
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 of working from home is that it may help to decrease the chance of being infected. The fewer people go outside and communicate with someone, the less possible the virus is to spread.
For instance
, in my homeland, the government managed to diminish the number of those who were affected by the coronavirus by giving its citizens the opportunity to
work
 at home.
Moreover
,
this
 approach contributed to mitigate the problem as a whole, since there were no crowded places and the risk of getting sick was very low. The
second
, but no less important reason why it can be a problem is the rise of lethal outcomes related to Covid 19. If employees commute to
work
 and perform their duties in a crowded place, it may lead to negative consequences. A good illustration of
this
 is an incident that happened a year ago in my hometown. Back
then
, people worked in offices, and many public places were overcrowded.
This
 has led to the fact that the number of deaths caused by coronavirus has almost doubled.
Therefore
, in order to solve
this
 problem, the government was forced to take drastic measures and restrict movement in the city. In conclusion, the Covid 19 situation is worldwide and affects many aspects of a person’s life, including the
work
 area. In my opinion, in order to prevent the spread of the virus and reduce the number of deaths, people should be able to
work
 from the comfort of their homes.
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