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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The Line graph illustrates the percentage of
population
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the population
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 from three distinct countries(USA, Sweden and Japan) aged 65 for the range between 1940 and 2040. Overall, it is noticeable that the percentage of the
population
 aged 65 and over is expected to exceed 20% by the year 2040,
however
, is not expected to exceed 30% in any of the three countries. Sweden and the USA are both expected to steadily peak throughout the years with an approximately similar flow. Both countries had less than 10% in 1940,
nonetheless
, it is important to mention that while the Swede
population
 saw a rapid increase between the late 1900s and the late 2000s, the American
population
 was almost static during the same period. Meanwhile, Japan saw a drop between 1940 and 1960, remained static between 1960 and the late 1900s until it
finally
 saw a steady increase in the early 2000s.
Besides
, the percentage is expected to boom in 2030 until it
finally
 peaks in 2040 potentially exceeding 25%.
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