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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 are of the opinion that the
stars
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current
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 time are popular for their assets and fairness than their work and achievements. I completely disagree, and firmly believe that modern
stars
 are striving hard to improve in all aspects to be
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complete
person
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people
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.
Firstly
,
this
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then
, move on to discuss
about
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significant
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 achievements and how these two factors influence
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the good of young
people
.
To begin
 with,
people
 with fame be it movie
stars
,
sportsers
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sports
, politicians etc. in the contemporary world have shown a lot of responsibility and care towards the welfare of their public. Their
scrupoulusness
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scrupulousness
 and dedication to be available to destitute and under-
previliged
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privileged
 at all times by establishing charitable organizations and other events is a great gesture.
Moreover
, these are the right ways to inspire
young
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 generation so that even they participate in
such
 welfare events.
Thus
, generalising based on few cases where
celebrities
 have set bad examples is not an
approprite
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appropriate
 way.
For instance
, during the pandemic where
lot
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 of
public
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 have suffered without basic medical amenities
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quiet
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 a few movie
stars
 have donated hefty amounts.
In addition
 to
that
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 they
also
 campaigned to raise funds for a good cause to which they received a huge response
there by
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 proving that they are not only socially responsible but
also
 take the
youth
 along with them in their great journey.
Furthermore
, even if we consider
celebrities
 in their domain, their contribution to that field is invaluable. They have inspired many young talents and even encouraged them to explore their domain of interest.
Thus
, it shows they do care
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 the
youth
.
For example
, sports
stars
 like Ronaldo, Messi,
Fedrer
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Federer
, Sachin have all set a high benchmark for the youngsters to have a crack at it. Their not only known for their talent but
also
 for being an all-rounder. Be it in helping
poor
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 or even in their field they have done it all to be
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 role
model
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 to any youngster. To conclude, generalising all the
celebrities
 and classifying them as a bad symbol to the
youth
 is a pretty hasty conclusion.
Thus
,
people
 should have a holistic view and not rely on few cases to decide if its
good
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 or bad influence. If we comprehend the above cases where
majority
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 of
celebrities
 have contributed
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 greater good of
youth
 by their talents and social activities, it can be firmly asserted that the
celebrities
 now set a good example.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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