Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotions and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products.

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Huge companies have a lot of finances to promote their brand,
therefore
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society tends to buy products from famous companies. There are many issues that
this
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tendency could bring to us. In my
opinion
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the most important are decreasing number of small and middle business companies and
monopolization
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the monopolization
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of global markets by a few corporations. In
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essay
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I will explain my thoughts and provide relevant examples of them as well as propose some solutions.
Firstly
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,
avaradge
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average
business firms are one of the main
part
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of a country's economy and if their customers start spending money to get goods from an import company it will lead them to bankruptcy.
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, a national economic system could become deteriorated.
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,
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of domestic brands will be eradicated.
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, the IKEA company
available
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on the all European union
teretory
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territory
, but they pay taxes only to
theyir
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their
domestic country.
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,
increased
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wealthy
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of the biggest corporations will allow them to promote their services and products.
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,
such
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organizations will dominate and control all markets no
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matter
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mater
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matter
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where their
costomer
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customer
lives. For
inctance
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instance
, the Amazon company is
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widespread
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wide spread
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widespread
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around the world due to advertising and sells any
merchandises
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. In the same
way
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small businesses lost their power and demand. In conclusion, I believe that the government should provide measures to control the situation and support national business
comapanies
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companies
.
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addition
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create new taxation type
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which
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wich
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will help to fulfil a country's treasury if necessary. Globalization is one of the main causes of diminishing success and it should be limited.
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