The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1908 and 2000.

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much
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many

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electricity
units
were generated in Australia and France in 1980 and 200 by five different fuel sources (Coal, Oil, Natural Gas, Hydro
Power
and Nuclear
Power
) Overall, total output significantly raised in both countries during
this
20-year period. While differences in production
was
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were

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never more than 10
units
between countries, Australia escalated its production from 100
units
to 170
units
.
Similarly
, France doubled the
amount
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number

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of
electricity
units
to 180.
Australian
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Australia

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never burnt nuclear
power
.
In contrast
, coal always was the main source of
power
for them. Coal provided 50
units
of
electricity
in 1980 with
a
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apply

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dramatic growth to 130
units
in 2000.
Although
electricity
based on
hydro
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hydropower

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power
increased from 20
units
to 36
units
, natural gas and oil-based
electricity
dropped to 2
units
form
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from

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10 and 20
units
respectively. In
France
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,France

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electricity
generation using nuclear
power
jumped from 15 to 126
units
.
Hydro
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Hydropower

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power
and natural gas only made 2
units
of
electricity
in 2000, while they supplied 5 and 25
units
of energy in 1980 respectively. Coal and oil did not experience remarkable change and their output remained about 25
units
of
electicity
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electricity

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