The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The charts compare how many
electricity
units
were generated in Australia and France in 1980 and 200 by five different fuel sources (Coal, Oil, Natural Gas, Hydro
Power
and Nuclear
Power
)
Overall
, total output significantly increased in both countries during
this
20-year period.
While
differences in production were never more than 10
units
between countries, Australia escalated its production from 100
units
to 170
units
.
Similarly
, France doubled the number of
electricity
units
to 180. Australians never burnt nuclear
power
.
In contrast
, coal was always the main source of
power
for them. It provided 50
units
of
electricity
in 1980 followed by a dramatic growth to 130
units
in 2000.
Although
electricity
based on
hydro
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hydropower
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power
increased from 20
units
to 36
units
, natural gas and oil-based
electricity
dropped to 2
units
from 10 and 20
units
respectively. In
France
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,France
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electricity
generation using nuclear
power
jumped from 15 to 126
units
.
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
and natural gas only made 2
units
of
electricity
in 2000,
while
they supplied 5 and 25
units
of energy in 1980 respectively. Coal and oil did not experience remarkable change and their output remained
about
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at about
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25
units
of
electricity
.
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  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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