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Nursing personal statement is very important for a job application. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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I am a dedicated and compassionate Registered nurse with career history in direct patient
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, proven ability to remain calm under pressure and skilfully handle difficult
patients
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 and high-stress situations. Consistently developing strong relationships with
patients
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 and families through therapeutic communications and respectful attitude. As an international nurse, I have received NMC decision letter and have successfully passed the NMC CBT Exam and the four modules of IELTS.
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, will require a Tier 2 sponsorship visa as I seek for an opportunity to
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 in the United Kingdom for better opportunities and where I can
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 bring remarkable contribution based on my
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 and experienced. Having worked in the following specialist facilities: Obstetric and gynaecology, Trauma and Orthopedic
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, Medicine, Surgery, Accident and Emergency, Paediatric
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, Special
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 baby
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, Dialysis center, Intensive
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, Ear Nose and throat (ENT) units, Opthalmology
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, Theatre and experienced a plethora of cases
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, Management of labour, Spontaneous vaginal delivery,Disc prolapsed, Lumbar spondylosis, Commuted fracture, Bilateral Heart failure, Chronic kidney Diseases, Diabetic foot ulcer, Hydrocele,Benign Prostrate Hypertrophy, Gun shot injury, head injury, Marasmus, sever malaria, cerebral palsy, Convulsion, seizures, epilepsy, Hydrocephalus, Jaundice, preterm babies asphyxia,coma, Acute Respiratory distress, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease ( COPD), Glaucoma, Cataract, Exploratory laparotomy, Appendectomy, hysterectomy and orchiopexy to mention a few. I am now searching for an opportunity to
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 in the United Kingdom for better opportunities and where I can
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 bring remarkable contribution based on my
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 and experience. I love new challenges and with my positive and proactive attitude towards
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 I will be ready to learn new
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 and take on several new tasks. I am very much interested in working with the University Hospitals Birmingham NHS Foundation Trust because it values: collaborative, honest, accountable, innovative, respectful are important to me as they are in line with how I practice (give
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) as a nurse. I understand the Trust is Keen about service delivery and the quality of healthcare given to clients, families and the community as a whole and it would be a great pleasure working as a team member or even a leader as I have been nominated to lead from college to university. I
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 have the ability to bring the best out of my colleagues as I am always delighted in them being part of the team.
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, I am well grounded in drug calculations, Microsoft word, excel and have a vast knowledge in ICT. More so, i love to research more on a particular treatment regimen to ensure evidence based practice is used. The following are my
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: leadership, Adaptability, Flexibility, ability to
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 under pressure etc. In regards to the 6 c’s, I am able to exhibit
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 in rendering a holistic and personalized
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 to
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 which is the core in putting
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 in the center of their
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. I am compassionate, caring, courageous, competent at rendering my nursing
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, committed to impacting positivity and a good listener. I am certain that the above are just a subset of what I can offer and would be elated if i am granted an Interview. I anticipate receiving a favourable response and working with your Trust. Sincerely, Emmanuel
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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