You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager should do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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to express my concern regarding the recent changes made by your company in the
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which I have been using for almost 2years. I am Ravleen Kaur,
2nd-year
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student of Computer Engineering Technician at City Centre College. I have been regularly using the number 5A
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, which operates between Brampton East and the city centre, to commute to and from college every Thursday and Friday at 8:00 AM and 5:00 PM. I have never had any problem with
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in the
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2 years , but recently your company has made some changes in the route and schedule without any prior notice, and
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has caused a significant inconvenience. Basically, the departure time has been changed to 8:30 AM from 8:00 am ,
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they have added many new stops in the route which cause extra delays. As s result I often face delays. I would like to suggest some ideas which may help to improve the
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. I kindly request that you consider reschedule the pervious
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timming or you may
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add more buses on
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route with more freuency .
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, it can
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decrease the over-crowding. I hope you will look into
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matter and take appropriate action. Yours faithfully, Ravleen Kaur

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Consider providing a clearer explanation of how the changes impact your travel, such as being late for classes.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph can focus on one main idea more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread for small spelling and grammatical errors, like 'freuency' instead of 'frequency'.
task achievement
You provided your details and explained the problem clearly.
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The letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • bus service
  • inconvenience
  • schedule change
  • travel time
  • commute
  • reinstatement
  • feedback
  • survey
  • accessibility
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