Some people believe that unemployed people should be made to work for their welfare/benefit payment. Others, however, see this as cheap labour. Discuss the possible advantages and disadvantages of making unemployed people take any job. Do you believe that making unemployed people work is a good idea?

It is a common belief that unwaged people are supposed
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low budget labour.
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, it seems clear that
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more
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to employ those labour force. Analysis
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opposite opinions would show
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. On one side of the argument, unemployed people
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medium perceptivity as most of them just finish compulsory education or lower.
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, the vacancies which are suitable for them require less critical thinking or involve more in physical ability. From that point, they would be paid disproportionate,
moreover
, elemental salaries due to the specific of their jobs. Base on my own experiment, fresh workers in my company have basic wages, approximate five
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dong, at the time they are recruited. The level of
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could hardly afford their welfare invoices.
Nevertheless
, it seems advantages that exploiting the unemployed people
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