Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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views

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about what subject in school is more important:

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science and technology. In

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essay, I will discuss both opinions and give my own view about

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topic. On the

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is considered

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of the most significant

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because it may lead to an increase

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patriotism and contribute

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tolerance between different nations.

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, if citizens know about what happened in past with their country, they will probably be proud and become more

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, it is very important that people know more about other countries and their

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knowledge may make them more understanding.

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, my friend had large biases about

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country and its residents.

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, he changed his mind after reading

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about

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land and understood that he was wrong.

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, I think that medicines which are proved by scientific employees and modern gadgets are more useful.

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, it may seem more helpful to know more about science and technology because society

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in the digital era. Many

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professions

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field are very urgent and good paid.

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, in my homeland, if a person has

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, he will get more money and have prestige in society.

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, new developments and gadgets can cause

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technological progress.

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of the good examples is the Internet, which gave so many opportunities and information that positive influence

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economical, educational, social and other areas.

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, science provides not only knowledge about

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and its living beings

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but

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develops new medicines that may save someone’s life. In conclusion, many subjects have

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students’

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development.

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the positive aspects that

history

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has, I consider that scientific and technological fields are more important for students in school.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

302 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cultural heritage
Historical perspective
Analytical skills
Contextual understanding
Technological advancements
STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
Innovation
Interdisciplinary
Job market
Climate crisis
Cultural identity
Critical thinking
Humanities
Contemporary issues
Integration
Tech-savvy

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