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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, mainly due to the pandemic, working home-office became a new reality for the majority of the population. Both kind of
work
 remotely and on-site has benefits,
however
, I believe there is more gain on telework because of the traffic reduction and increase in quality of life.
Firstly
, the pollution generated by the number of vehicles used for
work
 commuting is drastically reduced when working online.
This
 is because feel people have the facility to live near the workplace, every family has at least two cars and
also
 the couple usually works in a different company.
Therefore
, decreasing the need to drive every day to
work
 will help to save the environment. Another positive point is that people can use the time spent in getting to the office, doing activities that would make them feel better,
such
 as workouts and meditation. Studies prove that the practice of exercises improves your productivity at
work
. Saying that not only the staff but
also
 the employer are beneficiated. In conclusion, the carbon dioxide generated by automobiles declining and the employee's health increasing are only examples of the many advantages in working from home compared with working on site.
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