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IT IS EXPECTED THAT THERE WILL BE A HIGHER PROPORTION OF OLDER PEOPLE THAN THAT OF YOUNG PEOPLE IN MANY COUNTRIES IN THE FUTURE. DO YOU THINK IT IS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

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The detailed procedure of producing electricity from
water
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 in a
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 station has been illustrated by the given picture representation. At ,
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 the free flow of
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 in a natural river system has become prevented by the construction of a dam.
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,
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 is being stored in a reservoir, which can contain a huge volume of
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. From the massive ,storage
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 is released during daytime with intensive velocity for the generation of electric
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.
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, at night
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water
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 has pumped back again to the storehouse. The intake remains open in daylight and closes after sunset. At the
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 ,station a generator is placed along with reversible turbines, which operate after sunrise to produce electricity;
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, it assists to pump
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 back into high-level
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 gauge after sundown from storage, which stores less amount
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. After
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 ,production has been supplied with the assistance of cables or attached with pylons. They carry
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 with help of a generator to the national grid. Overall, the entire process of generating current can be understood easily with the help of diagrammatic representation in a well organised and systematic manner.
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