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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #train #subway #lines #traffic #congestion #roads
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products
 in today’s market are not what
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society needs, but are the ones
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 have been made popular by the
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 power of the global advertising industry. I strongly agree with
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 statement. Since, the late
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, there have been huge advancements in communication technology leading to
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 of information at
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. These modes of communication have been exploited vastly by
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corporations for advertising their
products
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products
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 were existing in the market and were already being used by
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 public. It was to make people aware
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 the availability, quality, cost and other features of the
products
 leading to
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 in sales at
local
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the local
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 and international
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. Due to the advent of
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 and
internet
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, the reach or impact of advertisements over the mind of consumers has crossed all barriers. With the use of modern tricks, manufacturers have been able to generate demand for
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 are not essential or needed by a common man.
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 of sports or movie celebrities is one of the easiest
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 to gain attention
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 fan followers or young consumers. The constant exposure of these advertisements even at
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 will make you buy things
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 you do not need or at a price
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 is not justifiable. Teenagers are
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 prone to
such
 type of advertising wherein they need to mimics their idols, who have been created by
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 of glamourous advertisements. Even politicians have resorted to advertising tactics to manipulate voters and get selected, which has been proven in multiple countries.
Although
, advertising is
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 part of our daily lives
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I strongly believe that it should not take
center
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 stage whenever we are out shopping for goods, appliances or consumables. We should be the
decision maker
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 for what I need and what I purchase.
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