In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that in some countries,
people
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interest
to
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the traditional
food
of
country
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and updated their
preference
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,turning to
the
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fast
food
.
This
message
are
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not suitable for families,individuals and societies.I totally support
this
statement as replacing
the
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traditional
food
by
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with
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fast
food
,because it can seriously damage the culture of the
country
.
First
of all,
this
essay will discuss
the
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why fast
food
gaining momentums quickly,and
secondly
will suggest the benefits of traditional
foods
and some reasons
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after that person’s
preferances
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preferences
are changed.
Definetely
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Definitely
,fast
food
is considered the preference of major
people
.
Conseqiently
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Consequently
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is exist some reasons.
Firstly
,fast
foods
are not expensive,and
actually
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available in every place.At times,
people
is
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so busy,and
some times
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they are do not have
a
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time to
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a
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lunch.And in truth,
people
uses
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the
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fast
food
,to get rescue
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starvation.
Therefore
,there are many outlets
of
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for
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fast
food
around the city.So
second
reason for that
,
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is the convenience of fast
food
.
Thirdly
,fast
food
institutions
is
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always available.Precisely,fast
food
unstitutions
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institutions
works
everyday
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,without
weekend
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a weekend
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,starting the earlier
at
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in
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morning,and finishing at night.After that,it is
easily
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to predict why fast
food
is popular. Turning to the
next
step,the traditional
foods
are different in each
country
.And it is
obviously
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that,the all of them do not have harm
ingridients
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ingredients
,and it is possible that they
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their special benefits,which helping
people
to stay fit and healthy.But,
people
become listless when meeting with traditional
food
,and they
are look
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for
food
like
to
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the
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nasty thing.
For example
,
traditional
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the traditional
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food
of Kazakhstan
“Nauryzkozhe”
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is “Nauryzkozhe”
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.To Nauryzkozhe add seven different and beneficial
ingridients
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ingredients
,but
people
,especially
young
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generation do not approve
with
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that. To summarise,I think we should respect the national and traditional
foods
in our
country
,
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because with
this
action we can improve our
culture
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cultural
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level.
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