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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #foods #food #impact #families #individuals #societies
It is believed that in some countries,
people
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the
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interest
to
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 the traditional
food
 of
country
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 and updated their
preference
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preferences
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,turning to
the
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fast
food
.
This
 message
are
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 not suitable for families,individuals and societies.I totally support
this
 statement as replacing
the
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traditional
food
by
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with
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 fast
food
,because it can seriously damage the culture of the
country
.
First
 of all,
this
 essay will discuss
the
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why fast
food
 gaining momentums quickly,and
secondly
 will suggest the benefits of traditional
foods
 and some reasons
,
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after that person’s
preferances
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preferences
 are changed.
Definetely
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Definitely
,fast
food
 is considered the preference of major
people
.
Conseqiently
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Consequently
,to
this
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 is exist some reasons.
Firstly
,fast
foods
 are not expensive,and
actually
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 available in every place.At times,
people
is
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 so busy,and
some times
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sometimes
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 they are do not have
a
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time to
having
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a
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lunch.And in truth,
people
uses
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the
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fast
food
,to get rescue
of
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from
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 starvation.
Therefore
,there are many outlets
of
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for
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 fast
food
 around the city.So
second
 reason for that
,
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is the convenience of fast
food
.
Thirdly
,fast
food
 institutions
is
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 always available.Precisely,fast
food
unstitutions
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institutions
 works
everyday
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,without
weekend
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a weekend
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,starting the earlier
at
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in
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 morning,and finishing at night.After that,it is
easily
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 to predict why fast
food
 is popular. Turning to the
next
 step,the traditional
foods
 are different in each
country
.And it is
obviously
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 that,the all of them do not have harm
ingridients
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ingredients
,and it is possible that they
are have
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 their special benefits,which helping
people
 to stay fit and healthy.But,
people
 become listless when meeting with traditional
food
,and they
are look
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 for
food
 like
to
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the
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nasty thing.
For example
,
traditional
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the traditional
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food
 of Kazakhstan
“Nauryzkozhe”
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is “Nauryzkozhe”
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.To Nauryzkozhe add seven different and beneficial
ingridients
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ingredients
,but
people
,especially
young
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the young
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 generation do not approve
with
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 that. To summarise,I think we should respect the national and traditional
foods
 in our
country
,
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because with
this
 action we can improve our
culture
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cultural
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 level.
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