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Many educational institutions give greater importance to subjects related to science and ignore subjects such as drama and literature. Is this a positive or a negative development?

#institutions #importance #subjects #science #drama #literature #development
In our rapidly developing
world
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 it is acknowledged fact that
science
 subject
are
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 more significant than drama and literature
subjects
 in
school
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the school
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 study plan. I am convinced that
this
 necessary decision is adduct to wicked trend.
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is presents
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 that it is negative growth and it is crucial to give
a
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deserving attention. To beginning with,
the
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one of the essential
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downsides
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down sides
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 of
orient
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 on
science
 subject is the
amount
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 of workplaces. Every year the workplace in
scientific
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a scientific
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 field
is decrease
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. New discoveries affect
to
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humanity
developing
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. So, they promotes
people
earn
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 a lot of money and build a successful career. And it leads to rising of competition.
Therefore
, it
one
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 of the
reason
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of
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people
 that throwing the dream to try out
the
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science
. Anymore, it
is not depend
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 on
people
 who major
on
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science
 can find a job.
On the other hand
,
science
 can create
a
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convenient
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 and financial stability. But art helps
people
 to be extraordinary and think wider. It is
clearly
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fact
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 that developing
science
 field
subjects
 are lead to economic progress and be wealthy. But human life is not only
earning
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about earning
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 money.
Also
, there are a lot of benefits to
study
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 a dramatic and literature. So, without these
subjects
 world become culturally poorer and bring
destroying
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 of moral values. In conclusion, the number of jobs for scientists will increase and it will result
of
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 reduction
artists
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in artists
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, writers.
Consequently
, it is important to balance funding the
science
 field
subjects
 and the art
subjects
.
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