Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interest, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It has been always argued that why some associations ask their employees to give some personal knowledge

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as marital status and some communities find it unnecessary, whereas others believe that it is necessary. In the forthcoming ,paragraphs I shall explain

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views. On the one hand, it may seem strange to ask about some private data when people tend to apply for work.

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, they have been asked to introduce their pastimes and tell about their hobbies and in some cases are asked about their marital status, which is an absolute confidential issue. ,

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for some jobs , candidates it is really beyond their grasp that how

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information can help firms to find a proper workforce and how much population can land a profession through giving these pieces of info.

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, owing to not having job security no one dare to give

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secret data to the association before making sure that they have a permanent career.

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firms and staff members benefit to share these items because for one thing through

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way employers can know more about their employees not only in terms of their capabilities, but

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by doing so collections can select a proper person who can satisfy all their needs,

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, they have a football team and there is a job applicant covering

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career responsibility and taking part in their team sports, so it can be beneficial for

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sides. Psychologically speaking, employers through asking these questions can know more about their staff characteristics and by doing so improve their productivity. In conclusion, even though there are some communities that argue that asking about personal material while applying for a position is unpractical, I personally tend to the proponents of

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view who believe that sharing these items with corporations can be useful.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

310 words

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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interest, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today, anybody can use a mobile phone to answer the work and personal calls at any time or 7 days a week. Does this development have more positive or negative effects on both individuals and society?

Some people believe that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that children should begin school when they are at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your opinion.