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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Humans have been smoking for hundreds of years,
initially
,
people
 take it as a fashion activity, and enjoy the moments it brings to us. Though no authority would encourage anyone to smoke, they don'
t
 ban the production of
cigarettes
, so
people
 can buy them conveniently. We realized that it causes serious health problems, the smoker usually has to suffer from more diseases than non-smokers, and they
also
 have a shorter life expectancy.
Moreover
, they cost society a lot of medical resources. One major reason for
this
 is, So some
people
 propose that governments should ban tobacco products. I do not fully agree with
this
 point of view for the following reasons.
First
 of all, there are already a lot of
people
 addicted to smoking. Cutting down the
cigarettes
 supplies may cause those
people
 to suffer from the addiction. And usually, they will try to find some alternative or
to
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buy
cigarettes
 from illegal sources, which may cause more problems because some illegal products may harm smoker's health even worse, and it is difficult for the government to control and regulate the black market.
Secondly
, some
people
 believe that they have the right to enjoy something as long as they don'
t
 hurt others, and tobacco is one of these things. We have to admit that tobacco is not as bad as drugs, and since
then
 we shouldn'
t
 expect government takes the same measure as
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drugs. To conclude, given that many
people
 still need it, and it takes time for those to quit, I believe banning
cigarettes
 could cause more problems than it solves. It doesn'
t
 mean we can do nothing about it, the government can still use the tax policy, smoking area limitation, and better education measures to control and reduce the demand for smoking.
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