Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and Industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that human needs for
farmland
, housing and
Industry
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are more important than saving
land
for endangered
animals
. To what extent do you agree or disagree? In the world of modernization and globalization, the demands of human beings have been increased compared to
past
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. We need more food, more machines, more place to live.
As a result
of
this
, people need more
land
to satisfy their requirements. We cultivate and irrigate more and more
land
to plant vegetables, build new buildings, airports, roads, etc. I think sometimes we forget that we are not alone
in
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this
planet. I have to disagree with those people who think that human needs are more important than saving
land
for endangered
animals
. I base my opinion on the following points.
First
of all, I already mentioned, we are not alone on
this
planet. A few centuries ago we were
the
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part of wild nature.
Animals
have equal rights as humans do.
However
, as
animals
do not have
an
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ability to speak, they cannot raise their voice for their rights. Each creature has a unique essence that characterized it. Each creature contributes something that affects our ecosystem. Taking one of those creatures
such
as
tiger
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or lion
,
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could harm
to
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the entire food chain and ecosystem in that particular area. A very good example here is
bat
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the bat
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. Bats devour thousand of
bugs
. Now the bats go to extinction. If we do not save the bats,
then
who kill the
bugs
? If no one is there to kill the
bugs
,
then
farmers need to devise new pesticides to kill the
bugs
that can be detrimental
for
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environment
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or even for us.
Furthermore
, comparing with the requirement of
farmland
and
industry
, the event that protecting endangered
animals
is
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more crucial problem that we cannot set aside. Without the increasing housing, we can maintain the current living situation, without more industries we still feed
us
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enough and live well. And in the
future
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if it is necessary, we able to build more facilities to satisfy us. But for
animals
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the problem is not simple. A recent survey conducted by
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biologists
indicate
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that every year a fair proportion of
animals
disappear from our planet and some of them are extinct. The extinct
animals
never come back once we lose them and our descendants will lose the chance to view these
animals
.
In addition
, plants and
animals
are responsible for
variety
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of useful medications. These species not only save lives but at the same time, provides the raw materials for the pharmaceutical
industry
.
Second
of all, I believe that we all need to think of the problem of overpopulation. The human population is dramatically increasing and we have to do something about it.
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my opinion, every family should have no more than two children. It will help to stop the growth of population, decrease the human needs for
farmland
, housing and
industry
. In a word, from the above
reasons
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we could easily draw the conclusion that the significance
bringing
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the salvation of the endangered animal overweighs that of making improvement of
farmland
, housing and
industry
.
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