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People celebrate Holi with utmost fervour and enthusiasm, especially in North India. One day before Holi, people conduct a ritual called ‘Holika Dahan’.

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People
 celebrate
Holi
 with utmost fervour and enthusiasm, especially in North India. One
day
 before
Holi
,
people
 conduct a ritual called ‘Holika Dahan’. In
this
 ritual,
people
 pile heaps of wood in public areas to burn. It symbolizes the burning of evil powers revising the story of Holika and King Hiranyakashyap.
Furthermore
, they gather around the Holika to seek blessings and offer their devotion to God. The
next
day
 is probably the most colourful
day
 in India.
People
 get up in the morning and offer pooja to God.
Then
, they dress up in white clothes and play with colours. They splash
water
 on one another. Children run around splashing
water colours
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 using
water
 guns.
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, even
the
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adults become children on
this
day
. They rub colour on each other’s faces and immerse themselves in
water
. In the evening, they bathe and dress up nicely to visit their friends and family. They dance throughout the
day
 and drink a special drink called the ‘
bhaang’
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bhang
.
People
 of all ages relish
holi’s
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hole's
 special delicacy ‘
gujiya’
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guitar
 ardently. In short,
Holi
 spreads love and brotherhood. It brings harmony and happiness
in
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 the country.
Holi
 symbolizes the triumph of good over evil.
This
 colourful festival unites
people
 and removes all sorts of negativity from life.
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