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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Today many people are
priortise
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prioritise
 and feeling more comfortable in renting houses,because of inflation in real estate market rates.
This
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pros
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prons
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pros
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 and cons of renting a property.
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First
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 and foremost reason is people who are immigrants from other countries always prefer
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renting apartments
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 because of the less rent and maintenance.
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,as there is
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 in
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unemployment, youth and skilled workers are not able to afford
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 of owning a property.
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,showing income proof is compulsory in many countries for buying property.
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,renting an apartment is easy, as it can be shown many free advertisement classifieds.
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,google classifieds is one of the easiest and has provision of showing different condo buildings with added amenities and gym,swimming facilities with a low maintenance fee.
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 why many citizens are
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 in leasing homes rather
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than purchasing
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.
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,there are negative aspects in renting
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 as for every lease agreement there are some rules and regulations in occupying the residence because
owner
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 of the house always aspect from tenant to pay rent
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every
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 week of the month.
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,if
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the tenant
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 was facing deployment there is
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 of cancellation of
rental
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the rental
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 agreement.But showing
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 statement is compulsory for
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 who
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 ready to occupy the space.
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,some residential buildings
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 condos and flats have an option of allowing pets because in higher standard buildings they are not allowing animals to maintain
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hygienic
 conditions. To conclude,
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 renting apartments has some negative aspects.
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, today many people who are middle class are
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preferring
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 in staying rental houses because of the affordability and comfort zone. In my opinion,
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 believe that
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this
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 benefits of renting outweigh its drawbacks.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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