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The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. Do you agree or disagree?

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Advertising plays a crucial role in helping sell a
number
 of
goods
 to consumers. Some
people
 believe that selling
large
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amount
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amounts
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 of
products
 to certain buyers is directly related to
to
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how much the
product
 is advertised in most cases ,even though, in other few cases the actual need of the
people
 is
also
 important for a
product
 to be sold. In
this
 essay, I will argue why
advertisement
 is
such
 an important tool for selling a
number
 of
goods
 to consumers and how powerful it is in increasing
revenue
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 of a company. It is impossible to deny the power of
advertisement
 especially in selling
high
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a high
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number
 of
products
.
People
 nowadays are engaged and spent most of their time on social
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media
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medias
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 and they easily recognize
products
 that they see on television and other
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media
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medias
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media
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.
For instance
, research on
a
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sales
 of certain
beer
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beers
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 showed that
,
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people
 especially men were tempted to buy that specific type of beer because they were advertised by attractive women. For these reasons, it is possible to say that
advertisement
 plays an important role to raise the
number
 of
products
 sold as
people
 are easily deceived by them and most likely to buy the
goods
 even if they don’t really need them. There are times when the need of
a
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society is proportional to the high
sales
 of
goods
. The more
people
 need to consume a
product
, the more they buy those
products
 from stores or shops so the more the
sales
 rise up.
For instance
, the
sales
 of a particular kind of facial
product
has
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 increased by
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threefold
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three fold
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 in just one month in Ethiopia after it was proved that it consisted of an
anti
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aging
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 ingredient.
As a result
 women especially
on
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 their early thirties purchased the
product
 highly that the
sales
 raised drastically. In
this
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these
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 cases, the need of the society is parallel to
sales
 of the
product
.
This
 essay argued why
advertisement
 holds a huge spot when it comes to
sales
 and marketing. In my opinion, it is crucial for a company to focus on advertising its
products
 in order to reach to
high
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a high
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number
 of consumers.
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