Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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person
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believe that youngsters should spend their leisure
time
with their
families
, others assume that it is not essential.
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However
, as
per
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my opinion,
children
's should spend some of their free
time
with their
families
, as it will help to build sound
relationship
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relationships
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among members. On the one hand, it has been advisable for
parents
to act a role
model
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and establish
ground
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level of behaviour among
children
by spending some
time
with them during their free
time
.
Moreover
, it will help to absorb conventions and build code of
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conduct
among
young
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generation . To illustrate, asking them about their
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names or their school day.
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will help, family to reduce the risk of
children
falling victim
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any activities
such
as bullying
,
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and negative peers.
Therefore
, after school child care and child-minding have been advisable by people.
On the other hand
, numerous numbers of people consider that it is unnecessary as they have their own life and father or mother should provide independence to them.
In addition
, today's, in many
families
both of the
parents
are
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means he or she is away from their
families
for a long
time
,
therefore
, it is not a viable option for all of them to be together during their free
time
. To exemplify if
parents
give independence to their
children
, it will build
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among them. To exemplify,
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self- dependent
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is one of its
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.
Thus
,
parents
ought to
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equal
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amount of freedom to their
child
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children
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. To conclude, while family
time
is essential for bonding and absorbing
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patterns
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patters
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of behaviour, but as per
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, spending all their leisure
time
with the
families
does not seems to have a
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positive
impact on their relationship.
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