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Nowadays many in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 of
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arrived
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who arrived
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 in 8
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 in 2009 and 2010. Overall, it is clear that
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there were no notable changes
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 the
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 of people
arrived
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at
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 every country except for three
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, Turkey, China, and Germany. Among the eight
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, France has the largest
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 of
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 in both 2009 and 2010, and there was no change in
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. The country which has the
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number
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 of
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 is
USA
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the USA
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, and
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 slightly increased, with 66
million
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tourists
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 in 2009 and 67
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tourists
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 in 2010. The
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 of
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 in Spain,
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the UK
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, and Italy has increased
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 between 2009 and 2010, respectively. It is noteworthy that the
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 in Germany was boomed in 2010 with 24
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, increased by 109% compared to the previous year. There were huge increases in Turkey and China, their
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 increased by 33% and 55% from 2009, respectively. Compared to
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 seven
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, Hongkong has the least
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 of
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, and the
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 was declined from 10
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million
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 in 2010.
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