The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the cause of this ? what can be done to solve this problem.

Natural
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environment was disturbed by increased human production of goods. Most outputs
made
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up
by
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natural
such
as products of wood, sand, wool or stone. Generally speaking,
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a human
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human
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could protect our nature. Nowadays,
building
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had been illustrated continuously, following by
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consumption of
people
lifestyle. Most
people
are not interested in things that are not their own due to they ever
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that
eccessential
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essential
to their life.
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, wealthy
people
wanted to
wearing
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neccessary
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necessary
that made them look well, they supported the customers that design
there
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clothes which
was
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made from wool like a fur coat or scarf.
Moreover
,
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furniture
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
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such
as
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cabinet
carbinet
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or table was made from wood, glass from sand,
stone
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was made into various decorations set up in the house. By the way, every natural
things
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was sold by normal
people
who work in woods or another, or rural persons who can harvest those
produce
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products
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to sell to entrepreneurs in order to produce the products to sell to the wealthy. which of these will be expensive. I realize, the government must set limits on how these natural things can be utilized to meet human needs. When used it must be known to bring it back to endure
instead
in order to keep
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nature intact not disappear or gone. I feel that natural
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apply the human life, could not
seperate
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separate
them out. To summarize, it
true
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that human behaviour
were
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demolished to the natural environment so, citizens could help each other apply for protecting our nature in order not to be damaged too much and will have to use for a long time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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