Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people feel that family

life

is being harmed by the

high-speed

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and pressure of contemporary lifestyles. I totally agree with

this

notion because fast pace leads to financial demands and stress leads to arguments between family members. The main reason why I believe family

life

is being compromised is because of the

desiration

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desperation

destination

to earn more money. People are now materialistic along with the progress of rapid urbanization. The higher salaries they get, the more they are fulfilled , which results in

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a situation

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situation

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that they try to find jobs and

money making

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opportunities, not only one but

also

two or even more

occupation

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As a result

, there is always a hectic schedule accompanied by less or no time left for their family. Another reason

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my support for

this

opinion is stressful conditions bring about every

quarrels

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family

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. If there is so much strain in daily living, people will easily get angry and usually irritate anyone else. To illustrate, when I come back home after a hard-working day with tiredness, I will always complain and argue with my brother just due to something insignificant or not worth mentioning. After that, I even have

worse

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attitude, disrespecting speech and refuse to reconcile with him in spite of his depression . So it is

mutual

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understanding

that is

needed right

then

otherwise

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we will weaken family bonding ourselves. In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that new living and burdens of modern

life

impact negatively on the whole family in general and each individual

in particular

. In short,

this

is caused by economic needs as well as disputes which should be eliminated for

perfection

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the perfection

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of family

life

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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