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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Car
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 is an incredible invention in the world. The
amount
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 of people who have their own
car
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 are steeply increased over these past thirty years which definitely affect
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each countries' traffic.
This
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the fact that increasing
car
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 ownership leads to heavy traffic and suggest some policies for
goverments
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governments
government
 to be able to encourage citizens to reduce using
cars
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. It is true that the more people own
cars
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, the more traffic jam in the city. There are many cities that are now facing
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 issue. In Bangkok,
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, there was once a policy named "The
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Car
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"
which
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in which
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 the government would pay half of the buying tax if that person bought
thier
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their
first
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car
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. Because of that policy, the
car
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 ownership rate was increased.
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, there was data from reliable sources shown that Bangkokians spent more time significantly on the road. There are two suggested measures that might help
goverments
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governments
government
 decrease the number of
car
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 users.
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, governments have to educate their citizens about the disadvantages of using
cars
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.
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, driving vehicles will lead to global warming because of
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
emission
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emissions
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 from the
car
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.
Secondly
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, Governments need to invest more
on
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 infrastructure.
This
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 development policy will definitely help
reducing
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to reduce
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 the number of
car
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 users by increasing the usage of public transportation. In conclusion, during the past thirty years, the usage of
cars
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 in many cities has steeply increased which lead to heavy traffics.
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, giving
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 about drawbacks of using
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 and improving infrastructure especially public transports could be governments' policies to decrease people from using their
cars
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.

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