It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

In the neoteric era,
development
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of
technology
is vital.
However
, some believed that the burgeoning of
technology
causes the extirpation of traditional cultures. I somehow concur with the
idea
;
however
, I almost entirely contest with the notion. A spotlight will be focused on both sides
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the ensuing paragraphs. I
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in an accord with the
idea
due to
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the lost
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lost
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of traditional
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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brought about by the modern machines in manufacturing
clothings
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clothing
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.
Philippines
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is an exemplar
to
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this
, as many ready to wear clothes are now manufactured and sold
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a much cheaper prices as compared to the traditional
clothings
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clothing
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that are being sewed or weaved by the locals. On the other side, I disagree with the
idea
more because I surmise that
technology
and traditional cultures can work hand in hand. For an instance, the advancement of
technology
such
as
internet
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and social media can be used in promoting the local culture of a country.
For example
, the famous weavers in the northern part of the Philippines are now exporting their products globally.
Hence
, local merchandise can flourish and be exported overseas.
Similarly
, new machines can help ease the burden
in
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manufacturing traditional products. The latest equipments in furniture
helps
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the
tradional
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traditional
rattan and bamboo weavers manufacture more pieces as compared to manual weaving of rattan.
This
will lead to more production and will generate more income
to
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the
idigenous
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indigenous
people. To take all things into account,
this
essay depicted that I somewhat agree with the
idea
due to the emergence of cheaper RTW clothes; but for the most part, I differ with the notion due to the international promotion and faster manufacturing of commodities brought about by
technology
. At the end of the day, the only
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in life is innovation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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