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You own an office in a commercial complex. The name on the electricity bill has not been changed by Energy Supplier. Write a letter requesting the Energy Supplier for a name change and updating their records with this amendment. In your letter • present identifying data (introduce yourself) • mention about your repeated efforts to get this job done • write why this update is important for you

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your
attenetion
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attention
regarding
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 a
request
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 which I made to change the
name
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 on
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electricity
elecrticity
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the elecrticity
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 bill. My
name
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 is Nikita, I own the office premises number 17 C in DLF complex at Noida branch.
Therefore
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, I have requested to change the
name
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 on the electricity bill;
however
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, it has been more than ten days since the
request
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 has been raised but your
engery
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energy
 supplier department has not made any changes. My
request
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indefication
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indication
modification
 number is TY76559.
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,I have sent several reminders on the email id mentioned on your website and have visited personally your office and appealed
your
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 staff to made the changes at the earliest. Despite my repeated
efforts
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 the
name
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 has not
being
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 changed yet. Let me explain the situation. The
name
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 change is vital for the purpose of renting the complex. As per
register
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the register
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 office procedure, they need
an
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apply
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address proof on the said property before issuing the renting agreement letter.
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, I
request
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 you to expedite the process. I solicit your cooperation and wait for your revert. My coordinate is (78) 6789999, and my email id is [email protected]. Yours faithfully, Nikita.

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