More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions to make people drink less?

It is said that the vast majority of people are choosing sugary
drinks
with a huge number of
consumption
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. In
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I will analyze causes and solutions according to
this
topic.
Firstly
, a cluster of youth, who sometimes suffer from
lack
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of physical sources or can be mentally tired, tend to purchase sweet
drinks
, which are so harmful
for
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people, especially in huge amounts of liquid.
This
is because they have throngs of sport or intellectual sessions during
school
lessons and to cope with
this
gap they purchase more and more sugary cocktails.
For instance
, most teenagers tend to buy ‘Coca-Cola’ or ‘Fanta’ in supermarkets and shops after their
school
hours before training sessions to increase their
level
of fitness.
Consequently
, it leads to toothache and health issues, where they must visit dentists to solve their teeth. With regard to the solutions
of
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that issue,
school
canteens may provide for the knockdown price
different
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types of natural lemonade. That may mitigate the
level
of sugar in their body, and they will have the same endurance before their training activities.
Secondly
, most individuals are tied up with their work and family duties,
therefore
they do not want to waste their
time
cooking some meal and via sweet
drinks
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they want to decrease their
level
of hunger.
This
is because we are living in
busy
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a busy
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time
, where everybody strives to save
time
for more beneficial things for themselves or their relatives.
Consequently
, it leads to their obesity or
other physical issue
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another physical issue
other physical issues
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with over-eating fruitless products.
For example
, most counterparts usually buy lunch with cola to
fulfill
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their stomach with water and food. With regard to the solution
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this
issue, they should reconsider their eating habits and switch from sugar water to protein bars or marmalade, which are healthier and less harmful compared to
the
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sugar-based
drinks
. In conclusion, we see several reasons for consuming these sugary
drinks
to deal with their lack of energy and their saving
time
due to busy
time
. The solutions of these problems must be solved on their parents
level
and on changes of
school
set of
drinks
.
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