Governments should not provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself.

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should be responsible

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support

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its people as

community

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contributes in many ways to

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society. In my opinion, I disagree that should not provide and

support

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its people.

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with,

public

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are

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the

ones

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who produces the most of the budget that they are using to make projects and build infrastructures that

community

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the community

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are using.

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Philippines they are supporting their nations by making different institutes that

helps

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help

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to save their income for

the

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future use.

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, workers in the Philippines are obliged to pay taxes

according to

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their income, it is

also

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mandatory for local employees and overseas workers to pay some of the public sector that benefits them like Pag-Ibig which

provide

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and

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support

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supports

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for

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education, PhilHealth which benefits them during hospitalization and purchasing medicines, another sector that can help them for loaning and retirement is the SSS. These are some of

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department that provides to

support

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its people inside and

out

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outside

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of the country.

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, they

are

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also

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having

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have

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retirement

fee

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fees

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who

served

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serve

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the nation like teachers, soldiers, doctors, police and many more as they

are reached

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reach

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at

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the age of 60.

Agency

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are entitled to give them financial

support

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even

they

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if they

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are not living anymore as long as they have their beneficiaries, help and care still be provided. Even the young workers can still add their elder member of the family to their beneficiary which covers them in all the benefits that they are paying. In

conclusion

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each of us should be responsible

to plan

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our future. The government can

support

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us by providing different facilities to help us when we are old.

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, working and saving can be beneficial too which ever unforeseen event can happen we are ready and not depending only

in

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the administration. Better to save for the future that can guarantee us no matter what

happen

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.