Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

While some people think that a higher
educational
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degree
attained from a
university
is given more priority than relevant
experience
or other soft
skills
while considering for a particular
job
, there are others who think vice versa. In my opinion, what must be given more weightage depends on the
job
profile, the candidate is being considered for. For academic jobs, a higher
degree
would be mandatory, but for business
fields
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it may be necessary. On one hand, many would have
agree
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that a good higher
educational
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degree
would put you one step ahead. Tertiary education is gaining importance with the current generations.
This
is very evident from the increasing number of
university
graduates every year.
For instance
, when a
job
profile is vacant and if you do not have a sufficient
degree
, it may become difficult for you to withstand the other high achievers competing against you, thereby, pulling you down the game.
On the other hand
, having relevant
experience
and soft
skills
like leadership
skills
and other interpersonal
skills
can throw the balance in favour of the applicant. Nowadays, the competition is very high and a single vacancy receives
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number of applications.
Although
,
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a large number of these applicants would be
university
graduates, it would be the
experience
level and interpersonal
skills
suitable for the respective
job
line that would push you up the scale. I believe that the
job
description would be the deciding factor.
For example
, for roles like a lawyer, doctor or
a
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teacher, a candidate cannot be fit for the
job
unless they have attained a
degree
. While for running a business, more than the
degree
, it would be the
skills
and
experience
that would help him succeed. To conclude, the
university
degree
as well as
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experience
and
skills
play an equally important role for various
job
profiles, yet the level of importance can vary from
the
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one line of profession to another.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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