SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT READING STORIES FROM A BOOK IS BETTER THAN WATCHING TV OR PLAYING COMPUTER GAMES FOR CHILDREN. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE ?

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Childhood is a time when most of

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development

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time our children develop skills like imagination, listening, creativity, etc. I

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that listening to stories stimulates more

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activity than watching TV or playing computer games. Hearing a

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being read from a book by a parent will help the toddler to improve their listening skill. Practising the skill from childhood can help an individual in his academic as well as professional life. Telling a

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to your child will allow you to spend more time talking with the kid,

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help in creating a bond between the father/mother and offspring.

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that babies who listen to their parents learn words quickly and start speaking soon, as compared to babies who have been less exposed to everyday conversation. Stories always

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imagination in a kid, since they are not visually seeing the characters mentioned in the

story

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mind will try to make figures and shapes which turn out to be their own personalised characters. When a child

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to grasp the

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the creative lobe of his

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starts to improve, thereby, enhancing the pupil’s capability for visualising complex topics easily.

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, when the visualising capability is improved, a person can easily map out complex diagrams and, can even have photographic memories. Studies have discovered that the creative side of

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was more active in scientists like Albert Einstien.

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watching TV and playing games are easy for a child to imbibe, there is minimal

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type of

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. All the places and characters are well defined and

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displayed on a big screen in front of the kid,

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amount of interaction between parents and offspring during a gaming session. In conclusion, I think narrating a

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is far more effective for the cognitive development of a pupil than playing games

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or watching TV with them.

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required the former should be given importance.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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343 words

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT READING STORIES FROM A BOOK IS BETTER THAN WATCHING TV OR PLAYING COMPUTER GAMES FOR CHILDREN. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE ?

Fully explain your ideas

The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy, which is unsustainable due to global warming. What future resource do you think will take oil’s place? Why do you think this?

Because of the rapid development of technology, it has been becoming easier for people to work from home. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of working from home

The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in theirlocal area, rather than imported goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or anegative trend?