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Online shopping is significantly increasing. What effect does this have to people, what are the demerits and what are the job opportunities?

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In today’s contemporary world,
public
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the public
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 tends to make purchases online rather than
physical
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 shops.
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 change has an exceptional effect
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 people
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 since it makes their life more comfortable, but it can
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 be the cause of self-isolation.
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,
increasing
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 number of online shops provides new opportunities for employees.
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 with, ordering goods from the Internet was originally made to make people’s life easier and more convenient.
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innovational
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 method makes shopping less time-consuming and requires less effort
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 since transactions can be made anywhere with
Internet
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an Internet
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 connection available.
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, if the nation can buy
necessaries
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 without leaving their houses in order to get to the mall, they will go out even less than before.
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 is due to the fact that ordinary tasks, similar to buying groceries oblige people to communicate with others and without
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 society might become even more isolated and lonely.
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, when ordering groceries using delivery services,
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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 and the deliveryman don’t even meet each other.
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,
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the development
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 of new spheres can open new
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workplaces
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work places
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workplaces
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 and vacancies. Obviously, maintaining and managing the store, delivering the products and more requires qualified specialists. These types of businesses
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 have a strong need
of
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for
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web-designers
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web designers
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, programmers and PR managers, which are new professions created in recent years.
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, the number of
web-programmers
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web programmers
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 and graphic designers has significantly risen when the quarantine occurred. Taking everything into consideration, modern methods of placing orders via the Internet have an enormous impact on
community’s
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the community’s
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 routine and everyday life by simplifying it and creating new job openings.
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, it
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 affects society’s average loneliness level by decreasing contact between people.
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