Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
modern age, every
subject
is taught by teachers, who
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expert in their way, are important to their life because the
students
, growing up in the future, can extend their knowledge
further
. While there are those people who believe that
pupil
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pupils
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should know about the
food
and how to cook the
food
, some people argue that they should learn
another subjects
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another subject
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more important than studying about
the
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food
. In my opinion, the
students
should study something more interesting because it might encourage
students
to interested in.
To begin
with, everyone should have cooking
skill
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in order to use
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ingredient in their house to feed themself. According to my experience, the
students
who choose
mathematics-science
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program,
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would have to take a biology class, so they can not avoid
to study
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about the nutritions in the
food
.
Moreover
, they were taught how to use ingredients properly because there are many ingredients that can be
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toxic if it is prepared improperly.
However
, there are
another
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subjects that
more
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important than just to know about the
food
.
For instance
, there is
some
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crucial
subject
everyone
have
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to learn which is mathematics.
This
subject
is requires
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people to know about calculation,
this
is
consered
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considered
more important than studying
about
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the
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food
which children might abandon
it
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in the future. To conclude, knowing about the
food
is not a bad idea for the school,
nevertheless
not everyone
have
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to know about it, In my opinion,
school
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should pay attention to another
subject
that children can adapt
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the future like maths, which is require some basic skill for calculation.
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