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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? there is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and example to support your position.

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There is nothing that young
people
 can teach adults?
This
 can only be a fallacy.In recent times,it has been discovered that the level of knowledge is not based on
age
.In
this
 essay,
i
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I
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 will prove to you that statement of young
people
 can not teach older
people
 is not true.
First
 and foremost,we have young
people
 in
this
generation
 who are open to learning,
hence
 they keep on getting themselves updated with vast information around the world and the move of technology
unlike
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 the older
people
.The adults are comfortable with what they have known,their enthusiasm ability to know more is limited.
For example
,my grandpa still believes it is best to use land telephones than mobile phones,my child of five years old can operate an android phone without supervision.
Secondly
,the younger
generation
 have a computer brain,they have a very swift ability to grab
things
 fast,they learn with the speed of light. The older
people
 assimilation rate is quite slow,so they have difficulty in grabbing
things
. Because the jet
age
generation
are
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 fast learners, they know a lot,they have vast knowledge about the evolvement of diverse technologies,
hence
 the elderly ones would have to learn from them.
For example
,a research was conducted where kids were left with
adult
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an adult
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 to figure out how a new machine would be operated, the percentage of children that got the way out
were
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 way higher than adults, its quite funny but it only shows the level of technology
this
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 younger
people
 have become acquainted with.
Lastly
,maturity is not by
age
 at all.A child who has been known to be grown emotionally,academically and stature wise can comfortably rule a group of
people
inspite
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in spite
 of the
age
 difference between them. Some kids are just gifted by God. I remember vividly,six years ago,a student was made to rule one of the largest
state
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 in my country for a week,he performed excellently,he had an exceptional level of wisdom.He was up to the task by virtue of experience, he had led a lot of groups in time past. In conclusion,there are a lot of
things
 the old
generation
 can learn from the new
generation
, they are the current teachers of our time.The younger ones are the guru of the better way of doing
things
.
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