Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families To what extent do you agree or disagree

Over the past decade, modern life has never failed to draw public attention and provoke debates. It is obvious that there
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some detrimental
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on
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families
due to
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pace and strain of temporary life. From my own perspective,
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totally agree with
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idea and
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will mention two reasons below. Nowadays, it is
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that people have to earn money by anyway, even though somebody does multitasking to
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necessary need of life which direct to make families feel stress out and tired extremely.
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take a chance and
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working in extra time in
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to make more money to be satisfied daily
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so we can’t keep engaging with our
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families
as well as take care of household daily. Another reason for adverse
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which come to competition among
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.
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there are some achievements to require high ability so
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extremely to gain expected result for making a number of career
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opportunities
in the future. In
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,
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and
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are necessary to improve
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or
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in university .
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conflict to be not enough time for activities with family as well as relax
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after
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day .
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time
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topic and
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examinations of various subjects so
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social interaction among families.
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on
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among family member. In conclusion,
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completely agree with the given view that rapid pace and burden of advanced lifestyle lead to conflict drawbacks.
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