Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is obvious that
people
will experience ups and downs throughout their lifetime in many aspects
such
as employment, study, or domestic affairs. Some
people
advocate that accepting those incidents is the best way to overcome while others are in favour of
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efforts to make changes. In my opinion, I endorse the former statement as I can see advantages from that acceptance.
This
essay will discuss both views
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People
believe that taking actions to improve
situations
can lead to a more successful life. Sometimes bad
situations
can be treated as important opportunities to make
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.
For example
, if
people
are sacked by their employers, they may be forced to consider what
job
suits their traits better. They may
therefore
find out a
job
that is
intriguing to them and give them a sense of accomplishment than the former
job
.
By contrast
, if
people
already experience fatigue from their jobs but they are reluctant to change, they may regret in a few years when they get older as they have wasted their golden time in
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for improving their
job
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On the other hand
, opponents think acceptance is a significant step before making any decisions. When worse
situations
occur in our life, it is likely that
people
will be overwhelmed. So, it is essential at
this
stage that
people
can enhance their tolerance, protecting themselves from
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breakdown. Accepting is a positive mindset that
people
can understand their circumstances via normalising.
For example
, when
people
have financial difficulties, if
people
can tolerate that they may have to start managing their finance harder from now on, they may not be too anxious about the consequences.
This
will allow them to have a clear head to thoroughly assess their
situations
and think about solutions. Without
this
ability,
however
,
people
may make reckless decisions like committing crimes when they have financial issues. My view is
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happen in our life, and it is more beneficial for everyone to develop an attitude of
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.
This
is because with
this
mental capacity,
people
are
therefore
aware of their
situations
, and they will not make any impulsive decisions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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