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Write about the following topic: Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Unemployment is a bigger problem that exists almost in all countries, and as a temporary resolution, governments provide monetary and non-monetary benefits to unemployed persons for a certain time period to fulfil their and their family basic needs. In order to ensure balance among the society, many people opine that these people should be made to do voluntary work. I totally support
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, it is important to make sure that the government is not burdened with
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 population in future. As you may agree, earnings without any effort can develop a sense of
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, the nation will be directed towards poverty and unemployment for a very long period. To mitigate
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 situation, it is necessary to make these long term job seekers some or other kind of free of charge work for the wellness of society. There are many types of voluntary work which could be assigned,
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 as, cleansing of environment, plantation trees, tutor services to below-par children and many more. An initiative started by India's Government called Mahanarega, where unemployed are provided with employment where they perform some or other above-mentioned kind of activities in return
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 compensation which can at least strive their basic needs.
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