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Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How can we encourage these people to live a healthy lifestyle?

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In recent times, a large number of
people
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 neither follow a healthy diet nor exercise daily. The main reason for
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 issue is the busy
life
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 of
people
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 and cramped living conditions. There are several ways to promote
healthy
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 lifestyle.
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 there is a myriad of reasons why
people
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 do not eat
healthy
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 or exercise, the main reason is the breakneck speed of their lives. Everyone these days are too busy to cook good food or invest time for fitness.
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, most of the working class
people
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 pick their breakfasts either from subways or nearby outlets on their way to work and after work would have dinner from some restaurant and go to bed. In
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 routines of
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, no one has enough time for anything. Another reason could be the cramped lifestyle. Many
people
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 live
on
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 apartments where there is
no
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not
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 enough space for exercising or to do any outdoor activities. Some
people
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 live with their co-workers in a one or two-bedroom flat, with each room being shared by 4 or 6 other
room-mates
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. In
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 living conditions, not many would have the luxury of spacious balconies for sports activities or yoga.
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, not all have easy access to gymnasiums and other facilities
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 to their accommodation. Some of them cannot afford the gyms because of the very high membership fees that they charge.
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,
people
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 must be encouraged to lead a healthy
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.
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 and foremost, initiatives must be introduced to promote awareness among
people
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 for their well-being.
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 could be done through various media channels, educating
people
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 on how to prepare easy and quick nutritious meals.
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, free three months
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 to fitness centres must be provided so
people
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 take an initiative to join them and once they kick-start
the
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 healthy
life
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 they can go ahead.
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 to that, most buildings must introduce free gym facilities as well. In conclusion, despite the busy and clogged
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 of
people
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 these days, measures must be enforced to promote healthy living. These can be done by conducting various public awareness programmes through media and encourage fitness centres to provide free entry, at least for
initial
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 few months to train them.
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