the charts below show what percentage of daily intake of avg person in usa consumes.summarise

the charts below show what percentage of daily intake of avg person in usa consumes.summarise
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The chart illustrates the export
earnings
of a country's petroleum
products
,engineered
goods
,
gems
and
jewellery
,agricultural
products
and textiles in the years 2015 and 2016.
Consequently
, the table gives information on the
rate
of change in the estimate of the export
goods
.
Overall
,we can see that petroleum
products
have the highest
rate
of
earnings
among the
products
,
while
textiles have the lowest.
Also
,the
rate
of change in value is the highest for textiles and lowest for
gems
and
jewellery
. The first chart shows that the
earnings
have increased in 2016 for all the export
products
except for
gems
and
jewellery
which has fallen by 5.18% from 2015.Agricultural
products
seem to have the lowest increase in
earnings
at 0.81%
Pteroleum
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Petroleum
products
and engineered
goods
have risen by 3% and 8.5%
accordingly
.Engineered
goods
generate the
second
highest revenue among the five
products
.
Also
, though there is a decrease in the
rate
of
of
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apply
show examples
earnings
for
gems
and
jewellery
, it is still the
third
highest earner among the three
products
.
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