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the charts below show what percentage of daily intake of avg person in usa consumes.summarise

the charts below show what percentage of daily intake of avg person in usa consumes.summarise
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The chart illustrates the export
earnings
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 of a country's petroleum
products
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,engineered
goods
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,
gems
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 and
jewellery
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,agricultural
products
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 and textiles in the years 2015 and 2016.
Consequently
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, the table gives information on the
rate
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 of change in the estimate of the export
goods
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.
Overall
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,we can see that petroleum
products
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 have the highest
rate
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 of
earnings
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 among the
products
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,
while
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 textiles have the lowest.
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,the
rate
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 of change in value is the highest for textiles and lowest for
gems
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 and
jewellery
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. The first chart shows that the
earnings
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 have increased in 2016 for all the export
products
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 except for
gems
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 and
jewellery
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 which has fallen by 5.18% from 2015.Agricultural
products
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 seem to have the lowest increase in
earnings
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 at 0.81%
Pteroleum
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Petroleum
products
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 and engineered
goods
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 have risen by 3% and 8.5%
accordingly
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.Engineered
goods
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 generate the
second
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 highest revenue among the five
products
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.
Also
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, though there is a decrease in the
rate
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 of
of
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earnings
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 for
gems
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 and
jewellery
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 , it is still the
third
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 highest earner among the three
products
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, products, goods, gems, jewellery, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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