Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recently, there has been a lot of discussion about the
age
for
retirement
. Some
people
argue that there should be a fixed
age
for
retirement
irrespective of the works at the same time few others opine
this
. In my opinion, certain heavy jobs need early
retirement
because when years progress the
people
will feel difficulties to do
such
kind of works.
This
essay will examine the topic in detail with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, old
age
is considered a
second
childhood. So, it is important to set free
people
as early as possible by offering a genuine pension as an honour of their work for the company.
Moreover
, nowadays the life expectancy of humans
also
declining because of
this
,
people
are not getting quality time with their children. So, letting them free at least by sixty years will be good for them to have some happy moments with their family members. Apart from
this
, during old
age
, the
people
will fall into sickness easily and due to
this
, they will struggle to perform well in their job.
Secondly
, certain jobs need early
retirement
.
For example
, driving jobs. Because when ageing,
people
may lose their eyesight and they can meet with accidents if they sustain in the same job. Another one is, lifting heavy items. During old
age
, the physical strength will decrease and most of them may land up with arthritis or joint pains due to the lack of calcium in the bones. Because of
this
, the above-mentioned task will be really daunting for them.
Moreover
, the worst one is dementia.
This
is
purely
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pure
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because of ageing and job stress. So, the
people
who hold a
high level
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position in a company should seek an early
retirement
before getting into
this
.
Finally
, old
age
is really a blessing if the person is healthy to manage himself both physically and financially.
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