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writing some people say that spending time to develop a successful career is the most important thing. Others say that spending time with friends and family is important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #time #career #friends
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The pictures illustrate the systems of Southwest Airport currently and its future appearance after experience some improvement one year later. Overall, the system will be enlarged in order to make more rooms for some new features and facilities. The most noticeable change of the airport is the number of gates available for the
passengers
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 to access will be increased.
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, before the improvement, the system is considered quite small with a limit of eight gates only. In the departure room, it is quite spacious with just two facilities which are the check-in station and the café drinking area for the
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 to use.
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, the future plan for the airport will have some significant modernization in facilities, convenience in transporting, etc. The
first
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 things to easily notice are the control rooms which will remain unchanged.
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 will have the sky train system as the means of transportation to drive to them one of the eighteen gates. In both departure and arrival rooms, there will
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 appear more convenient features to improve the
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' experiences, which will be the luggage drop area, the ATM and vehicle hiring service in the arrival place.
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